Lord of the Flies Corrections

Lord of the Flies

Corrections

 

1. Children are missing after plane accident. They hardly survive in uninhabited island. They are divided two groups. One is elected Ralph as leader, the other elected Jack as leader. They regularly collide over decisions. finally Jack's group kills Ralph's group except Ralph.

2. Ralph : Leadership , Equality , Peace , Nokill

 Jack : Cruel , Power , Murder , Desire to be recognized by children

3. I think the movie show human nature. Human have a lot of freedom, they erupt human nature. For example, At first Jack dosen't want kill friends. But finally Jack dosen't mind about it. So human has evil everyday. We must think about it.

 

1) Describe the setting.

A plane fell down. there are some children in plane. children were isolated in uninhabited island. they made two groups for survival. they came into conflict each other.

 

2) Describe two of the characters.

One character is Ralph. he is intelligent so he became a leader.

the other character is Jack. he is ambitious so he disappointed when Ralph became a leader. Later, Jack lead some children who support him.

 

 3) What do you think about this movie?

 I feel discomfort because I seem see dark side in human. this movie shows human nature. as time goes on, they reveal their true colors. for example. later, Jack committed a murder. he didn't feel of guilt. this movie made me bitter.

 

1) Describe the setting.

Flight accident is happen and childrens are isolated in island. And the island is an uninhabited island. And childrens make two group. One group's leader is Ralph and the other group's leader is Jack

 

 

 

2) Describe two of the characters.

Ralph try to suevive many children's. And peaceful leader. He have a positive mind.

I think Jack is a tyrant. he ignore Piggi. And he have a negitive mind. I think Jack's inside is shrouded in fear. But he didn't expresse his mind. And he act as strong.

 

3) What do you think about this movie?

I think this movie's meaning is people reveal brutality by fear. And fear make a Social cut - throat gangsik. And broke the rule, and don't judgement by rational.

 

 

 

Lord of the Flies

A plane crashes in the ocean.  The survivors, who are mostly school children of various ages, use a raft to reach an uninhabited island.  There are beaches and small hills on the island.  The shoreline is either beaches or rocks.  The island is covered with tropical trees, some of which are banana trees.  

Ralph becomes the leader of the group because he is the most responsible member.  He is kind to the younger children.  He is loyal and trustworthy.

Jack enjoys breaking the rules.  He is cruel – especially to Piggy. 

Piggy is overweight.  He is not in good shape.  He is, however, intelligent, rational, and calm.

I think this movie tells us a lot about the dangerous side of human nature.  It also shows that rules are an important part of society.

Lord of the Flies

1)  Describe the setting.

2)  Describe two of the characters.

3)  What do you think about this movie?

Week Three Corrections

Buyeo is located in the middle of Korea.  There is not very famous. But I'm very proud of my hometown.There is very important place in history. There was a capital of Bakjae. There is so many tourist attraction.

 

There     location.         I live there.

 

There is

There are       existence

 

Buyeo is not very famous.

Buyeo is a very important place in history.

Buyeo was a capital of Bakjae.

There are so many tourist attractions.

 

I grew up Incheon. There is a major traffic point. because There has international airport and harbor

 

In + a city       I grew up in Incheon.

 

Because I'm an introvert, It is hard to speak in English to someone.

introvert, it is hard

 

If anyone wanna play soccer with me, just tell me!

Form   wants to

Wanna      not standard spelling,  can be found in internet chatrooms and text messages

 

I want to play soccer.

Standard pronunciation   “wanna”

 

 

My merit is that I am prudent.  Because of this merit, I don't make a rash decision.  But, ironically it is demerit that i have a lot of things on my mind.

Incorrect use of a conjunction

Capitalize the pronoun I

 

Ironically, it is a demerit that I have a lot of things on my mind.

 

And my another Hobby, computer games.

Missing verb   (is)

Playing computer games

Hobby doesn’t need to be capitalized

Incorrect use of a conjunction

 

Wrong word       another

My other hobby

 

I like suddenattack so much that i played all day long last year.  So i couldn`t studied well....... But i really like my school. aren`t you think so too?

Sudden Attack

Capitalize the pronoun I

Incorrect use of a conjunction (2)

 

aren`t you think so too?

Don’t you think so too?

 

Don’t you like it too?

 

Tag questions ask for agreement.

 

My favorite movie is ‘Dead Poets Society’. So My motto is ‘carpe diem’ that mean seize the day.

Incorrect use of a conjunction.

My doesn’t need to be capitalized.

Form         when the subject is third person singular (that), base form + s or es

 

My favorite movie is ‘Dead Poets Society,’ so my motto is ‘carpe diem.’   That means seize the day.

 

I’m from the south korea. I grew up in a state called Gwangju.

 

Some country names use “THE.”      The United States, the United Kingdom of Great Britain,  the Republic of Korea, the Philippines.

 

I’m from South Korea.

Capitalize the names of countries.

 

I grew up in a state called Gwangju.

Wrong word      state

city

 

When I get diet, I do some exercise ( jogging etc ).

Wrong word     get diet

Go on a diet

( jogging etc ).

Like = for example

When I go on a diet, I do some exercise, like jogging.

At this time, I loose weight and my body get more healtier.

Wrong word                 loose  (opposite of tight)

lose

my body get

form    third person singular subject + base form + s or es

form of a comparative                healthier

I lose weight and my body gets healthier.

 

When the opportunity, i wants to do boxing later.

 

When the opportunity

Missing subject, missing verb

When I get the opportunity,

 

i wants to do boxing later.

Capitalize I

Form       first person singular subject + base form

I want to do boxing later.

 

How to be healthy, first, I evenly eat a lot of food.

How to be healthy

How to be healthy?       Rhetorical question.

Don’t ask rhetorical questions.

 

I evenly eat a lot of food.

Wrong word        evenly

I don’t understand what this means.

 

I should exercise every day, because These days Increased my body weight.

These and Increased don’t need to be capitalized.

These days Increased my body weight

these days I am gaining weight.

 

 

Jogging and push ups on the night

Get up early in the morning.

To ride a school bus

Eat slowly,eat evenly

 

Jogging and push ups on the night

Missing subject , missing verb

I go jogging and I do push ups at night.

 

Get up early in the morning.

Missing subject

I get up early in the morning to ride the school bus.

 

Eat slowly,eat evenly

Missing subjects.

I eat slowly.  I eat evenly.

                             Meaning?

 

I like every exercise and activity! so I`m enough healthy

!  exclamation point.   Goes at the end of a sentence.

 

I`m enough healthy

Word order

 

Enough + noun        I always get enough sleep.

Adjective + enough        I’m healthy enough.

 

 

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